Remembering
I remember the waves splashing up on us like it was yesterday
I remember when I was 9 years old playing in the freezing water
I remember my adventurous grandma was there
I remember us laughing and splashing each other
On that frigid March day
We were all dressed in sweats
But in minutes the kids were carefree and in swimsuits
The cold air did not bother us
Neither did the water that gave your toes frostbite as soon a you stepped in
But after reaching the water only my grandma and I loved it
The rushing water tempted you as soon as you saw it
The waves would race towards us
Just as the waves were about to hit us, we jumped over them
We were engulfed in the crashing waters
We did this for hours on this sandy San Diego beach
Even though this memory was three years ago,
I remember it vividly
I am glad my grandma and I had this memory
Because this was a time to remember
What a beautiful poem! The repetition really had a strong effect on my as a reader and I loved the imagery. To take it up to the next level, I'd suggest adding some figurative language, like simile or metaphor to add depth and richness to the poem. Really great work!
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