Why I Appreciate Veterans
Did you know that there are over 22,658,000 veterans in the US? All around the country, there are veterans who served in the wars all over the world, just for us. Without veterans, where would our country be in the world today? Veterans have served our country well. I know so many veterans, and they are all so kindhearted and sweet. I appreciate them because they served for our country, they fought for all of us, and they dedicated their life so that we could be free.
(This is just the first paragraph because its way to long to post the whole thing)
That was really good! I loved how you mentioned how many veterans there are in the US because it makes people realize how many people gave their lives for us. I know this is only the first paragraph, but I think it would be cool if you mentioned some names of people you knew who fought. It was really good though!
ReplyDeleteThis is an excellent opening paragraph--I can tell the final piece will be great. Just like Halli said above, the actual number of veterans is staggering. Really good claim statement there at the end. Make sure the rest of your essay links back to your first paragraph. Well done!
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