Remember
By: Braden Christensen
I always like to remember
Although it is sometimes quite hard,
I sometimes forget that my dog is named Ember
I once got to remember Ember playing in the yard,
But that was very long ago
and I am beginning to lose it all,
now I am laying down low
with Ember at my side
I wish I could remember so much more
I really like how you used rhyming in your poem and reallly like the real meaning of it
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I like it! I don't really get it that much, but I love your rhymes, they just add so much. You are a good writer and I can't wait for more!
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I liked how you where talking about how you couldn't remember things but wish you could.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you worded it. I sometimes cant remember things too.
DeleteI really liked how you worded it. I sometimes cant remember things too.
ReplyDeletecool poem! the only thing that caught me was the last sentence. it does/ doesnt rhyme but still works! it was really great!
ReplyDeleteGood work telling the "story" that is in the poem. Before you send it in, I would advise doing some strong revision where you add a lot of verbs and adjectives to "show" and "tell" your reader what you are writing. Your poem needs more description. I love where this is going and look forward to your final product! Well done:)
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