I didn't exactly remember how I got lost in that forest, or why I was in the forest in the first place, but I did know one thing.
Well, two things.
One, I was lost in a huge forest at nighttime. Completely alone.
Two, I was really hungry.
" 'Come hang out with us in the forest,' " I mimicked to myself as I kicked a pebble. " 'It'll be fun', they said."
I shoved my hands in my hoodie pocket and took a good look around at my bearings. It looked like a set straight out of a horror movie. Tall, thick trees with dark leaves that blocked any moonlight, if any. I could hear dry pine needles snapping loudly under my Vans in the eerie gloom.
It was quiet.
Too quiet.
"Well, this is dandy," I muttered. My iPod was back in my older brother's van, and he 'forgot' to bring flashlights. They (as in he and his football friends) were probably attempting a "ditch-the-sibling-in-the-woods-to-be-rid-of-them-forever".
If so, they were doing good. I was scared out of my mind. Who knew, there could have been werewolves for all I cared!
I huffed and nodded. "Well, there's no point in just standing here waiting for my impending doom." I straightened my back, took a shaky breath, and continued forward into the woods. There seemed to be absolutely no signs of any sort of wildlife anywhere, which made the whole ordeal even more terrifying.
Then the sudden realization hit me:
"I am in a forest. All alone."
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Sorry it's so long! I guess I'll post the next part soon. I tried to make the main character as unisex as possible so the reader can connect either way. Thanks for reading, I guess...
I love this so much. Your an amazing writer and I can't wait to read more.
ReplyDeleteAlaina you did amazing on this! I love this so much! I can't wait for you to post more!
ReplyDeleteI think this is the best story I have seen. I love the humor that was put in it, but I also love the fear of being stuck in the forest all by yourself! I wouldn't change anything, so keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteI think this story is very nice. I liked the things you put in there that were not needed but they were very funny.Try putting a little more adjectives in. I can't wait to see what you come up with next!
ReplyDeleteYou are an excellent writer! There is a lot you are doing right, from humor to the hyphens, to the unisex character--well done! To take it to the next level, add some more details about the forest: sounds, sights, smells. Figurative language would be good too. Looking forward to the next part of your story!
ReplyDeleteYou did a great job on this and I loved how you used references to things that had already happened to the main character, even though you never told us them, it really got me thinking. To improve on this I think that you should add more description about some of the smaller things in the story, for example the hoodie that he/she was wearing.
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