Baylee--good start but I want you to add a lot more to this. With the capitalization, there is a very famous poet named e.e.cummings who never used capitalization. So, if you want to do that, be consistent. I'd like to see you revise the poem and add more detail and description. Mention specific foods, compare them to things: make me hungry! Keep up the good work:)
Good job making me think about food. Food really is good. One thing I would do is change the "Food" to "food" on the 4th line if you're not having capitalization.
I really enjoyed reading this poem. I think it was really creative how you got me thinking of all sorts of foods to fit the description of the words. However, it was a little short so it would be better if you had made it about one or two stanzas longer.
I really like that poem! It makes me hungry too. It's super good!
ReplyDeleteThis is probably one of the best poems I have ever read... Anyways, this poem has really nice rhymes in it. Keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteBaylee--good start but I want you to add a lot more to this. With the capitalization, there is a very famous poet named e.e.cummings who never used capitalization. So, if you want to do that, be consistent. I'd like to see you revise the poem and add more detail and description. Mention specific foods, compare them to things: make me hungry! Keep up the good work:)
ReplyDeleteGood job making me think about food. Food really is good. One thing I would do is change the "Food" to "food" on the 4th line if you're not having capitalization.
ReplyDeleteI love that poem! It made me hungry!
ReplyDeleteAwesome poem! I love food! I agree with Mrs. Robins, it would be cool if you added more words and specific foods. Love it!
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ReplyDeletebaylee, i agree food is really good it is the best thing in the whole entire world!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeleteI agree hahaha
ReplyDeletegood job baylee maybe make it a little longer.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed reading this poem. I think it was really creative how you got me thinking of all sorts of foods to fit the description of the words. However, it was a little short so it would be better if you had made it about one or two stanzas longer.
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