I Remember
In remember the time that Germany beat Argentina in the 2014 Fifa World Cup.
The score was 1-0 and I was so, so, so very happy. I was so happy I almost cried.
I couldn't calm down for ever. It was happier than when I tied my first shoelace.
Now it is over and I am waiting for the next World Cup to come.
Kyler! That is really good!! The only suggestion I have is to be more descriptive, but yes that was very exciting!!
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ReplyDeleteGreat job Kyler. I almost cried too. I think you should make it longer
ReplyDeleteI'm so freaking ticked off about that world cup. It was a good poem, but if it was longer and more descriptive it would be better.
ReplyDeleteI love you soccer fans! You have a great start--excellent event to write about. I really want you to add a lot more to this piece. Describe the details of the event and how it made you feel. Use figurative language to add color and depth to your writing. Looking forward to the revision!
ReplyDeletei think that maybe you should try to make it longer or more exciting
ReplyDeletePretty good. I liked the beginning because it seems like the kind of introduction that would get the reader to read more, the hook. Although, It could be much longer and much more descriptive about the game. Keep up the good work!
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