Wednesday, September 24, 2014

A Weird Dream

A  Weird Dream

         I woke up to the sound of rain on my window, it sounds like mice or bunnies running all over it. I got up and looked outside and it was pouring. I did the same thing I always do when I wake up on Saturday mornings- went and laid back in bed with a book (The Giver). I guess I fell asleep because the next thing I know I'm sitting in the middle of a bright green field with grass that is about up to my knee. I looked around and saw a house but it wasn't mine it was big and the paint on it was cornflower blue. It looked like my friend Lizzy's house. I looked around trying to find my phone but I couldn't find it. I got up and started walking around to find my key and my phone when it started raining. I started walking towards Lizzy's house when I tripped in a puddle of mud. Great. I sat up and looked at the sky which was a mix between grey and light blue. I saw a flash of lightning that looked like it had just split through the whole sky and a few seconds after that a loud crack of thunder. I better get inside before it starts raining. I got up and ran towards Lizzy's house. Sitting on the porch was a Pitbull I recognized him, it was Chaos Lizzy's sisters dog. He looked up when I got up the stairs and on to the porch. I walked up to the door and knocked right after I knocked I heard what sounded like some plates drop. When the door opened I Lizzy. "Hiii!" Lizzy said. "Hi Lizzy! I don't even know how I got here but I was just in that field and it looked like it was going to start raining so I ran up here," "Come inside" I walked inside and the wallpaper was light blue and light brown stripes. "We can call your mom to come pick you up." Lizzy said. I nodded my head and she walked into the kitchen. "She'll be here in a minute" She yelled from the kitchen. "I'm going to go wait for her outside! Bye and thanks" I walked outside and I walked over to a tree in their backyard that looked easy to climb. I swung my arm around the lowest branch and then swung my legs on to it. Using my other arm I pushed myself up so I was sitting on the branch. I then climbed up the next branch and just sat on it. A flash of lightning and a clap of thunder scared me to death and I jumped which made me fall out of the tree . I hit my head on the branches below me on the way down then hit my head again on the ground. Everything started going blurry until everything was sparkling. I woke up on the floor in my room, I guess I fell out of bed and not out of a tree. It was still raining but I was back home. That was a weird dream!

4 comments:

  1. Sorry! I did pretty bad on this one because I was rushing.

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  2. Your story was very descriptive, I suggest though that you have the main character stay in scenes throughout the story longer. besides that you did a great job. Keep up the good work!

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    1. Yeah. I updated it because it didn't really make sense in some parts. I'll work on that for the next one. Thanks!

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    2. Good advice from Ethan here. Excellent writing Taylor! You did great because you've created a character and a compelling story--well done:) To take it up to the next level...add more description through similes and metaphors. Also, break it up into a couple paragraphs. Looking forward to more!

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