Lauren's life made a huge turn when she had been
diagnosed with cancer. She could no longer be social with all of her
friends, have much fun, or even attend school. Yet still, while
having to bear all that, she made her primary goal of each day to be
positive.
In only a matter of a
few days, she went from being a normal teenager to a cancer patient.
She had days that were better than others, and she even created a
system to measure that. At the end of each day, she would ask herself
if the day went good, or bad. If it was good, she would place a blue
rock in a jar. Otherwise, she would place a red one in a separate
jar. Because she focused on being positive each day, she needed to
get a larger jar for her blue rocks multiple times. Due to
medication, she lost her all her hair, was sick most days, and spent
most of her time in her hospital room.
However, she gained great experiences. One day, she attended a meeting where
cancer patients would meet together and talk, learn, and understand
cancer. She learned a lot and made many friends. One day, after
several doses of medication, doctors reported that the cancer had
been wiped out completely. She had once again took another huge turn
in her life.
After she was given
permission, Lauren was able to continue her education, social life,
and become a normal teenager once again. Now she is working with a
foundation that helps other people who are diagnosed with cancer.
When Lauren’s life took a turn, it took a turn for the better.
I think this is fantastic! There is very little you need to do to have it ready to send in. I love how you give detail as you recount how Lauren coped. You have excellent transitions and sentence structure. Maybe add some additional detail about Lauren, post cancer. Excellent writing!
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