Friday, September 19, 2014

Majestica Prologue



Prologue

                A shuffle of feet and the sound of a vase crashing woke me up. Hail the size of baseballs punched the sides of the house as hard as they could and the wind pushed against the window. I slipped out of my bed and peeked out the window. Snow reached the halfway mark my little sister had marked the day before, the mark she wished the snow would reach.
                A small thud of something falling over came from the hallway, as I sat up and rubbed my eyes. My first thought was one of my parents getting some early morning hot chocolate, thanks to the blizzard outside. A small glow caught my eye and my clock’s dim glow interrupted the complete darkness. Almost two in the morning, way too early for hot chocolate.
                “Makala!” I whispered hoarsely. There was a tinkle of bells and the small fairy appeared on the windowsill, looking really pale.
                “Jake,” she gasped, her usual tan face white as a ghost. She fell to her knees as I rushed to her. Her wings slowly hovered in-between transparent and opaque, then all together, she disappeared.
                “Makala,” I kneeled by the place she had vanished and hoped she would appear again, but the sound of bells didn’t come and she didn’t appear again, smiling.
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10 comments:

  1. By the way, that post was mine. I forgot to put my name. It's Rebekah's.

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  2. Wow! That was really good. You added a lot of details! I felt like I was actually in the story. You are a very talented writer. Keep up the great work!

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  3. I liked your story! It had a lot of details and it was so realistic! I could see it in my head like i was the person in the story! Good Job!

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  4. Great Job! That was great! Your details painted a perfect picture. Keep those ideas coming. I can't wait for more!

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  5. I love your rich descriptions and unique storyline--just fabulous! My suggestion is to thrown in some metaphors and similes to add more variety to the story. Looking forward to more!

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  7. That was soooooo good! I love how detailed it was. I felt like I was actually there instead of reading it! I can't wait for more!

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  9. That was really good.... wait.... no... it was amazing. I am soooo glad I got the chance to read this. Super excited for next month now.

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  10. That was amazing! I don't think that I could ever come up with that. I loved how much detail you put into it and how anxious it made me to hear more about the story. It put a perfect picture in my mind and I could see a blockbuster movie coming out about it. I don't think you could make it better because it is already super amazing.

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