They Saw Me
They saw me and laughed
They walked away
I sat there on the ground
I felt tears running down my face
They read those texts
They replied
They broke my heart
I sat there staring at the screen
They sent those messages
They sent those mean things
They told me they would keep it a secret
I thought they were my friends
They made me do it
I thought it was okay
I thought they were nice to me
I thought they different
Who knew what they were really
I didn’t know that they faked everything
I thought they were trying to be my friend
But I was wrong
No one should be bullied
No one should have to go through what i have gone through
No person should feel the way I have
No one should feel hurt or betrayed by their friends
No girl or boy should have the power to hurt someone
They need to understand that its not okay to be mean
They need to be taught that bullying is wrong
Kindness is true friendship
You make friends by being kind
Everyone deserves to have a kind friend who is nice to them
Everyone needs a friend
Everyone should be nice to others
They should be friends instead on enemies
Kindness brings everyone together
It's the power of friendship
I loved it Emily, so heart felt. One thing to consider is there are a few word misplacements and grammer errors specificly in the 4th stanza. Other than that amazing job I will definetly consider this in certain situations. ;)
ReplyDeleteMy favorite part was the ending, it defines the true meaning of a friendship! I agree with sophie, just a few grammar fixes and more detailed words. But great job!
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ReplyDeleteEmily, this was amazing. I just noticed a few errors, and those were just some grammar mistakes, and you should've put "of" instead of "on", in the 9th stanza. I also agree with Hallie and Sophie, that you need to put some more detailed words. Other than that, you have amazing writing and I was so touched by it.
ReplyDeleteWow, Em. This was amazing. You did so well describing what you felt. I agree with Hallie and Sophie. Just some minor grammar mistakes but other than that excellent job. I really liked in the 6th stanza, the repetition with the word 'No', you should do that more often. Great job!! :)
ReplyDeleteWow, Em. This was amazing. You did so well describing what you felt. I agree with Hallie and Sophie. Just some minor grammar mistakes but other than that excellent job. I really liked in the 6th stanza, the repetition with the word 'No', you should do that more often. Great job!! :)
ReplyDeleteRight on! I loved it! I liked how you described all the things in each stanza. The only thing that could make it better is a fixing a few grammar and spelling mistakes. Other than that, it was great!
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