Space Contest
We should continue exploring space. There could be some other mineral or plant that could be a miracle cure, other intelligent life forms could give us knowledge, and colonizing other planets could solve overpopulation.
If we travel to space, there could be a plant that is a cure for cancer on some planet. There could be super metal that could enhance buildings.Why should we pass up this opportunity by staying here? The probability of finding some different thing that can help us is very high in space. Different conditions could lead to different plants.
The universe is endless. The probability of there being another life form in the universe in nearly endless. Not only that, but it may be smarter than us! By not exploring the universe, we could be passing up an opportunity to end sickness and war.
The world’s population right now is about sixteen point four billion people. Soon, there could be too many people and not enough food. If we don’t slow down we could face extinction. That is why we need to find someplace else to live. We could starve to death in the next three hundred years.
In conclusion, we need to continue space travel. There are any benefits to doing it, like finding a super cure, other intelligent life, and colonizing other planets.
Pretty good. I liked that you included a claim and structured your essay correctly. Although, the paragraphs do not have enough sentences and you need to include some facts with citations. Besides that, great job.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Locklin. It was really good and well stated but next time try to add a couple more sentences in each paragraph.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Locklin. It was really good and well stated but next time try to add a couple more sentences in each paragraph.
ReplyDeleteThat was awesome! I never thought about it that way! One thing you should consider is maybe telling us a couple more places where maybe humanity could survive but other than that great job. I'm sold on the idea.
ReplyDeleteThat was great! After reading that, I'm totally sold on the idea of space travel. The only thing that could make it better add more sentences in each paragraph, other than that, I would love for space travel to actually happen.
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I would suggest to write the prompt in the beginning. Also, put in some back round information. For example "Scientists are thinking about banning space travel." "I think they should continue though because........" Really good reasons and evidence!!! Keep it up~!
ReplyDeleteLoved your essay! Your claim statement was perfect. I would just add quotes from other stories. I also would just add more details to some of the paragraph. Great job!
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