Space
Should we keep exploring it? Should we find out all we can about it? There is a debate going on about whether we should keep exploring it. Of course we should keep exploring it!!! It is another wonder in the human mind. It first started with a race, a competitive race. To see who could get a man to the moon the fastest. I mean there are different planets out there and maybe even life in other galaxies. That possibly means more planets than earth. And of course outer space it beautiful. It is just like starring a mystery right in the eyes, and we are the detectives. I know it costs a lot of money to explore, but it is like a hobby where we love to do it. It is just challenging. But again everything can be challenging. So all in all, I think it is worth it to explore.
Good job Matt! I really liked the hook at the beginning and all of the details. Maybe one thing that I would fix is maybe combined some of your sentances. For example, "It first started with a race, a competitive race. To see who could get a man to the moon the fastest. Maybe if you combined them it could make it even better! Keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteGreat Job Matt! This was pretty good! I liked how you described it in the beginning to where you questioned yourself great job the only "correction" I have to maybe add a little more detail and maybe make it a little longer but other than that good job!
ReplyDeleteIt's great Quig! Keep it up! I agree with Annie. Combining sentences is a great way to hook people up. Again, great job! It's awesome!
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