I listened to "Cotton Candy" by Edward Hirsch and I really liked the descriptive ways he described the cotton candy and the bridge.
My poem:
The robot overlords are here
My poem:
The robot overlords are here
You should probably run in fear
They can cut you with their laser
They will zap you with their taser
They shoot and smash
You burn and crash
The robots are so rude and reckless
They will even steal your necklace
Human race is not their friend
A dollar they would never lend
They shoot and smash
You burn and crash
Terrorizing is their game
Your life may never be the same
Thrown in jail for something stupid
There’s no such thing as a robot cupid
They shoot and smash
You burn and crash
The robot overlords can’t rule
In fact they are insanely cruel
Please defy them when they yell,
or your soul they will sell.
They shoot and smash..
RUN LIKE A FLASH!
Really good Skylar! I liked how you made every stanza rhyme and it also made sense. Next time, maybe try to be a little bit more descriptive but other than that it was amazing.
ReplyDeleteNow this is my kind of poem! This is really goo Skylar. I would maybe add a little more description like Kyler said. But other than that, this was really good!
ReplyDeleteGreat job!!! I love how you made every stanza rhyme, like a song, I would also make it a little more descriptive too but other than that I thought is was awesome!! Keep it up!!
ReplyDeleteGreat job!!! I love how you made every stanza rhyme, like a song, I would also make it a little more descriptive too but other than that I thought is was awesome!! Keep it up!!
ReplyDeleteIt could be a song! That's cool! Great work! Maybe you could discribe the robots a little more and it would be great! Good job!
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