Luke April Post
I read the poem Cotton Candy and enjoyed it a lot. The things I liked most about was the way that you could imagine and put yourself in the authors shoes and see yourself there.
My poem:
Family Fun
I like to hang with my family
Where ever I am at
Even though they cause me agony
I love them because of that
Jumping in the water
and seeing a big old splash
or playing with my sister
and beating her at twister
My family is super tight
even though we fight.
Luke that was awesome!!! That completely explains how family is. Maybe you could add some punctuation marks next time but other than that it was marvelous!!! Great job and keep up the awesome work!!!
ReplyDeleteI really liked your poem!! however, I thought you could've said more reasons why you like your family, but other than that it was great!!
ReplyDeleteThat was very good! I liked that you made some of your poem rhyme and that is definitely what family's are like. Although, you could use some punctuation marks. Besides that, great job!
ReplyDeleteThat was a great job! but I agree with Baylee you could have added a little more detail. But other than that it was a great job.
ReplyDeleteThat was a really good poem! The rhyming made it really good! But you could have added a little bit more description. Really good writing!
ReplyDeleteThat was really good. I liked how you explained how many families are. Maybe just add some more description about how you feel about your family. Also put some more punctuation. But other than that good job!
ReplyDeleteGreat job Luke I loved how you were very descriptive of what you do with your family. But I think it could use a little bit more rhythm in the end stanzas, but other then that it it great!! Keep up the good work!
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