I listened to Edward Hirsch's "Cotton Candy". I really liked how descriptive it was and how it was kind of a memory. I liked the way he read it too. I was kind of hungry at the time I was looking through the poems and the title "Cotton Candy" really appealed to me then. I loved how it didn't rhyme, so maybe that was also why I liked it. Here's my poem: Worth
A small smile,
but no words.
A small frown,
but no tears.
Crying alone,
then laughing out loud.
Being hurt,
but hiding it inside.
Flying away,
while no ones home.
Swimming back,
when you aren't alone.
Laughing,
wondering who you are.
Smiling,
when you realize what you're worth.
I just kind of typed what came to my head. It's a bit depressing but also happy... Weird.
Your right on the depressing part. You did a really good job on the emotions, although you didn't have many words it was still very easy to discern what the character was feeling. I really liked the "but hiding it inside" line, it gives the feeling that the character has been going through some hard times lately or had something bad happen to them. Other than that you did a magnificent job.
ReplyDeleteWOW!!!!! That's awesome! I never thought about what you just said! That's awesome!!!! I love how you nailed everything! The emotion is so strong! Taylor 1 word: AWESOME!
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