Monday, April 20, 2015

April post

       The poem that I read was the poem cotton candy. I liked this because he related to his grandfather and how they would walk together. I also liked how he described the cotton candy coming from no were.

     The Game
       You smash into the ground it hurts.
The grass is soft and painful like it should.
The ball is so close to going in.
You imagine the ball in the net.
But then your dreams are crushed.
As one defender comes and kicks the ball away.
    But you team has already won the game.

3 comments:

  1. This poem is so touching! It was really good. It could be just a bit longer, though. Good job!

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  2. Cool poem, but I would add more to it. Describe more about the day and the score. The reader really wants to picture it. Good job.

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  3. Good job. I would make it a bit longer however. You should describe more about what happened.

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