The Game
You smash into the ground it hurts.
The grass is soft and painful like it should.
The ball is so close to going in.
You imagine the ball in the net.
But then your dreams are crushed.
As one defender comes and kicks the ball away.
But you team has already won the game.
This poem is so touching! It was really good. It could be just a bit longer, though. Good job!
ReplyDeleteCool poem, but I would add more to it. Describe more about the day and the score. The reader really wants to picture it. Good job.
ReplyDeleteGood job. I would make it a bit longer however. You should describe more about what happened.
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