My Poem:
Roses are grey
Violets are grey
This is what I see
all of the day
Sometimes I swim
Sometimes you laugh
But I only see grey
But you don't see that
I frolic a lot
as you can see
A dog I am
as dog as I can be.
Wow! That was really good. I loved how you didn't say at first what "you" are. I would just add in some punctuation. But other than that, it was really good!
ReplyDeleteI truly love the ending. The poem really kept me guessing. I am with Emily, although your poem flows well the punctuation could be improved. Great job!!
ReplyDeleteMan, you really had me going there until the end. I thought that this guy was color-blind in like a weird way so that everything he saw was grey... yeah. Anyway, the description was really well done along with a bit of detail as to what the character was doing. Great job!
ReplyDeleteWow, this was... deep. I thought it was going to be some sort of depressing poem, but it turned out to be a dog. Like whoa. There were some times I think you could have capitalized, but that was... fantastic.
ReplyDeleteGood job Matt! I liked the ending! At first I was confused because of the grey part but then I read the ending and it was great! lol. Maybe somethings that I would fix are maybe you should capitalize some words! But other than that it was very well done.
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