Once, in the time of the Pilgrims, there lived a witch. She lived a peaceful life in the backcountry of Watershank county, New York. She would not hurt any animals, but humans were a different story. Explorers tried to stay away from Watershank county. People would disappear of the face of the earth. Some say that the witch would turn the remains of the bodies and boil them in a cauldron to stew potions.
One day, a visionary by the name of Howard T. Plartplat decided to colonize the area. Many warned him against it, but Plartplat would not heed them. He and a group of foolish pilgrims set off on their journey. As they got closer to the witch's shack, the witch showed herself. She warned them that if they settled down by the lake, a horrible curse would befall them. Plartplat strode up to her and stabbed her in the chest. With her dying breath, the witch cursed him and his band that a horrible curse would befall them in five year's time.
The group settled down north of the lake. They called it Watershank lake, and named the town Watershank. All went well until, on the night of the fifth anniversary of the witch's curse, all of the town's original residents woke up in their beds, eyes glazed and pure red. They all trudged to the lake and threw themselves in, drowning themselves. But what happened after was even more horrifying. A giant Sea Serpent rose from the water and let out a terrible, bloodcurdling cry. The townspeople's dead bodies joined to form the Sea Serpent of Watershank lake. Some say that on dark nights, you can still see the red eyes of the monster, watching you through the fog.
Very interesting! One thing that Mrs. Robins said in the instructions was to give a lot of detail and description. I would add a little bit more about the setting and characters. Like what does the town look like and what are the characters names? But other than that keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteYup, Hallie nailed it. Go back and add more description and detail. However, it's a fantastic start to a story--unique characters, setting and storyline. I'm excited to see what this one will look like when you revise and add more to it! Thanks:)
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