Friday, March 27, 2015

Joe The Dog


    Once upon a time there was a dog named Joe, he had a friend named Bob. They were best friends they did everything together. Now these dogs were not your normal dogs they talked and they also ate soup. Joe's Favorite soup was bean with bacon and toast. One day they were eating soup and then "pop" the soup was gone, where did it go you may ask? The evil cat lord of Uptown stole all the bean and bacon soup.Joe was so mad!!

     Joe and Bob went on a hunt to find the soup of destiny (aka bean and bacon soup). The two friends went to gather all the dogs to join their dog army. Now the only dogs that would go were dogs that were very old. So Joe and Bob chose to go on there own and find the soup of destiny on their own. But Bob got a GREAT idea he decided to run for president. Now Bob was having to run against the great lord Matt Van Gil's of Destiny!! Bob lost but they had harder maters on their hands the cats were attacking and they had no idea were the soup of destiny was. THEY WERE LOST!! :(

7 comments:

  1. I love your story it is very creative, i think we should work together more to make them better. I like hoe you think outside the triangle. I look forward to working with you in the future.

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  2. I love your story it is very creative, i think we should work together more to make them better. I like hoe you think outside the triangle. I look forward to working with you in the future.

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  3. really cool story! You left out some periods, but other than that, Great!

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  4. really cool story! You left out some periods, but other than that, Great!

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  6. Good job! I would add more detail about the setting. Where do they live and what does it look like? This would really help to be able to picture it in your mind. Detail is great in stories. Nice work!

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  7. I know you and Quig were sitting next to each other (I remember the bean and bacon conversation) but you can't collaborate and post the same basic story. I'll be splitting the points between the two of you. See my notes on Quig's piece. You both need to do an original piece, on your own, with lots of detail and description:) Hallie said it well. Revise and let me know when you reposted. Thanks!

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