In the rugged hills of a mountain, there was a rock named Rocky. Rocky had a friend named Fuzzy, who was a bunny. Fuzzy would take Rocky for rides, while Fuzzy would talk about life. Fuzzy's family didn't like him because he was the runt of the family. Rocky had an idea, how about Fuzzy just grow tall. That sounds like a great idea! Said Fuzzy. Then out of nowhere a eagle came down and swooped Fuzzy up into the air. rocky felt scared and wished for his friend back. Rocky looked up into the air and saw the eagles nest. Then Rocky had an idea! He could just save Rocky! He whistled for his friend Cooper the dove. Cooper came flying down to him, and asked what he needed. I need you to fly me up to that nest to help me save my friend Fuzzy. Cooper swooped him on his back, and flew him up to the nest to save his friend. Rocky found Fuzzy curled up in a ball at the edge of the nest. Rocky whispered to Fuzzy telling him to come to him. Fuzzy looked up with a very happy face noticing his friend had come to save him. You saved me! Shouted Fuzzy. fuzzy jumped onto Coopers back and they both headed back down to safety on the ground, and into Rocky's little bush he called home. There was a hole leading to Fuzzy's home inside the bush, which is how Rocky and Fuzzy met. Fuzzy thanked him and Cooper, than headed home where he would grow tall.
(Written in CTE)
Cool story. I found some small mistakes like name mix ups, for example, "Then Rocky had an idea! He could just save Rocky!" I also found an uncapitalized Fuzzy, but other than that, it was good!
ReplyDeleteIt was a pretty cool story. Most of it was really good, but there were a couple things that could use some work. Maybe if there was a little bit better punctuation in the story, then maybe it would be even better.
ReplyDeleteIt was cool but you left out some things and it was sort of confusing but all in all it was good.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Matt and Carson it could use more punctuation and it was a little confusing, besides that it is great!!!
ReplyDeleteReally interesting story. I also found just a few mistakes like punctuation and capitalization. Other than those mistakes it was really good and I liked it!
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I liked the idea of the story! I also agree on the punctuation and capitalization. If you fixed those simple mistakes it would be even better! Keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteGood start but you need a lot more here Sadie. The bare-bones story is working well but you need to add a lot more detail and description to paint a picture in your reader's mind. Typed during CTE huh? Lol!
ReplyDeleteThis is really cute! I think you should add a little more description to make it flow better, but I liked it!
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