It was a blazing hot day when we finally arrived to Akumal Beach. The 45 minute car ride didn't help our desperate need of something cold to plunge in. Eventually we made it through the crowds of sweaty people to the crashing ocean. I took off my sandals and walked right in. The water gave my hot, red skin some relief. There were so many people building sand castles, splashing, and snorkeling. My parents had just sat down and I was already bugging them to get the snorkeling gear out. My mind couldn't resist the urge to explore the deeper waters.
To start, I put the huge, made-you-feel-like-a-pig goggles on, along with the snorkel. Next I strap on my flippers and waddle to the ocean. I was eager to see what animals were ahead, so I started swimming further out. I soon realized that you have to breath only through your mouth and not get too deep. Or else, the next thing you know you are choking on saltwater. After I got the hang of it my dad and I saw an object moving in the corner of our eyes. We turned around and what I saw shocked me. It was a gigantic sea turtle the size of my 10 year old sister! It's shell was emerald with a scale-like pattern. It felt like I was in the movie "Finding Nemo". Like I was a part of their world. Then, a few more of his ocean friends came too. Fish were swimming right under our feet, their slimy skin would make me shiver. All of the sudden my dad dove deep into the sandy bottom. He was reaching for the turtle's tough shell. I watched him as he pet the delicate animal. My dad insisted that I try. So slowly kicking towards the creature, my hand rubbed against his smooth shell as he swam by. The moment was unreal! At that moment all I wanted to do was ride on top of it. Snorkeling with the swift sea turtles was a breathtaking experience.
To sum it up, Snorkeling in Mexico was the highlight of my trip. I swam back to shore thinking "I am glad I had my family to share that with." My family took off our fins and goggles with dry mouths and puckered/shriveled lips. I sat on the dim beach recalling the memory of snorkeling. Soon, we packed up and headed home in our rental car. That day was a day well spent, even if it all started with a long, hot car ride.
Great job Aspen! I think that was is so cool! I liked how you described everything. And I think you can describe it a little more... Maybe a little bit more about the drive there/back, other animals you saw, you get the idea. I liked in the last paragraph where you put 'took off our fins and goggles with dry mouths and puckered/shriveled lips'. It helps me visualize way more! Keep up the good work! :)
ReplyDeleteGood job Apsen you are a good writer. I really liked the way you described everything it gave me a picture in my head of what it looked like, and I liked how you explained how you put on the snorkeling gear on. Though I really liked when you said "I put the huge, made-you-feel-like-a-pig goggles on, along with the snorkel". The only thing that I think that you should change is you should add more about what you saw while you were snorkeling because it sounded so cool . Otherwise it is perfect.
ReplyDeleteThis piece would technically be creative non-fiction but I'll let you count it for this month. Your descriptions are brilliant!! By choosing such fun words, you really added color and texture to your writing. It was easy to visualize. This is one of your strongest pieces, very well done!
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