Wednesday, March 18, 2015

Dreams

"BEEP, BEEP, BEEP." Ughhhhh. Some day I should turn off my alarm clock and go "BEEP, BEEP, BEEP." to it. Maybe then it'll know how annoying it is. "Stop talking to yourself, Taylor," I mutter to myself. "Seriously? I just did it again! I'm doing it now too... I should just stop talking." I get out of bed remembering the dream I had last night. Ash. It called in a creepy voice. I start walking toward the bathroom to find out who had said my brothers nickname. Once I get there, I start walking very slowly to the shower. I grab the side of the leopard print shower curtain and pull it to the side. Screams was all I could hear in that moment. It was like an out-of-body experience. I could see myself  in my soccer shorts, pink tank top, and grey slippers standing there screaming, and I could see five green blob things with faces stacked on top of each other screaming too. Then, the green blobs vanished and I realized they were part of the video game. That part of the dream slowly faded into black. I was now back in my room. It was all empty except the posters of random stuff on the wall, and there were no blinds on the window and it was pitch black outside. I was hanging out with my favorite band 5 Seconds of Summer, and some friends. Suddenly there was a knock, not at the door, but on the window. Startled, I ran out to my friends. "Did you guys hear that?!?" I asked my everyone, they all nodded their heads and were looking really terrified. "Who would go knocking on peoples windows?!" Someone asked. We were all just standing there thinking. Knock knock. Another knock. on the window of the room that we were standing in. Now it was just getting even scarier. We all turned around toward the window and screamed when we saw faces staring in. There were people who were all dressed up. But... It wasn't Halloween. Just then, we all got a text message saying that a Halloween in March had been added. "Well, this means candy so I'm in." I say. I realized that I had been sitting on my bed for fifteen minutes. "Whale, that was an interesting dream... But I loved it!" I squealed because 5 Seconds of Summer were in it. Better go get ready.

5 comments:

  1. The was AWESOME and creepy at the same time. It was really good though. The only thing I would say is try to use more adjectives but other than that it was awesome!!!

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  2. This is awesome, I love how you painted a picture in my mind!!! I do think you could add bigger words though! Other that that, I think you did great.

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  3. Was this an actual dream???? It's great!!!! I love it! Great describing. Like Lucy said, you did paint a perfect picture in my mind. It was awesome! Didn't find any mistakes though. Guess I'll keep looking :)

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  4. That was strange but awesome (sorry Mr. Manning). I really liked how describing you were in the story. I couldn't find any mistakes so I thought it was really good. Keep it up!

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  5. Ha! I think everything is awesome (take that Manning). Lol! Taylor, well done. Your descriptions are really specific and I love it because it paints a picture in my head. Really strong writing with an interesting undertone.

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