The Note
Chapter 1
Gorge was usually the last person to use his rings at all for anything. From levitating objects around, to shooting fire balls at pesky birds. He rarely even did ether of those. But today, that would change.
Gorge was on his regular afternoon stroll when all the sudden he looks up and sees a boy falling out of the sky. Less than a second later he is holding the boy with his levitation ring. He started to pull the boy towards him when he noticed a dungeon temple guardian riding a glido beast heading his way. "How did that get here!", he thought to himself. He thought about flying but he realized he was still bringing the kid toward him. He had to make a choice between meeting up with the guardian or saving the kid. He started sprinting for the kid.
Good Job Ethan I really like the idea of this writing piece it was very unique I could not think of this! Great Job I would add a little more detail like how the bell sounded or add more exciting words! Other than that it was great!
ReplyDeleteWhat bell?
DeleteGreat job Ethan! That was really awesome! I liked how at the end he chose the boy instead of the guardian. One thing that I would fix is maybe adding a little bit more detail on what everything looked like! But that was really good!
ReplyDeleteGreat job Ethan! That was really awesome! I liked how at the end he chose the boy instead of the guardian. One thing that I would fix is maybe adding a little bit more detail on what everything looked like! But that was really good!
ReplyDeleteGood start--there isn't a whole lot of detail and description, and it ends abruptly. Add more to this and let me know when you've revised it.
ReplyDeleteThanks:)