Sunday, March 8, 2015

march post

I wake up to the smell of biscuits. I sit up, and get out of bed. Eager for breakfast, I walk myself downstairs. I see the oven turned on, eggs on the frying pan, but I see no one. "Mom," I yell. I receive no answer. I search in all of the bedrooms, bathrooms, and finally the basement. I go back upstairs and flip my phone open. I text my mom- where are you? I went downstairs but no body was there and the biscuits & eggs were still cooking. 20 minutes later, I still get no answer. I decide to call her. Again, after what feels like a million times, I have no answer. I put my sandals on, and walk to the neighbors. I knock. No one is there, so I let myself in. There is food splattered everywhere. From what I see, mayo on the baseboards, tomato sauce on the ceiling, and lettuce scraps everywhere. "A sandwich gone horribly wrong," I whisper to myself, with a little chuckle. I also look around in their house, and see no one.

I have no idea what is happening. "What should I do?" I ask myself. I decide to call 911, even though it sounds stupid, I really have no idea what to do. I call. Someone answers this time, but they say nothing. All I hear is an eerie laugh. I am scared. I cry. Helplessly, I get up, get dressed, pack my backpack full of water and food. I grab my mom's car keys. I am only 14 of course, but I hate running. I will have to figure this "driving" thing out. I get in the car, start the ignition, and pull out. I drive very slow and again see nobody in my neighborhood around. I take a right, and go onto the main road.

There are no cars driving other than mine. I realize that I have forgotten money. I look around, stop the car, and find my mom's purse. There is $120, and a check for $30. I go to the gas station. But if I can't find anyone, can't I just get gas for free? I pay anyways. While leaving the station, I see movement in the gas station window. Of course, I have no clue what to do. I am not going in there. After what I heard on the telephone after calling 911, I am truly scared. And what if it is some psycho freak is in their and does something to me? I leave the gas station. I finally decide where to go. My dad's house.

Two and a half hours later, I arrive at my dad's house. It was a miracle that I made it there with all my limbs still attached. I walk in, and to my surprise find him there. He is sitting on the couch. "Dad!" I yell. He turns his head. But this is not my dad, it is someone else. I make eye contact with him and he laughs, the eerie, familiar laugh I heard on the telephone. I turn and run.

4 comments:

  1. The plot to this story was really good! Maybe you could just explain what the car looked like a little more and also what your surroundings where like. Other than that I really like it!

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  2. This was so good! Everything you write is always really creative and interesting and immediately gets me reading. You should explain the troubles that the character was having with driving the car and explain what the creepy psycho person looked like. You should also explain everything that you packed into your backpack. Other than those, you did an amazing job and I really liked this it was super interesting. You should keep writing this!

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  3. That was really good and kind of creepy! Could you describe the man? That would give an affect.

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  4. Creepers! You had such excellent description in the beginning with the kitchen. I could really see it happen. I'd love for you to flesh this out and keep it going. I'm with Shade where I want more about the creepy guy. Great start!

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