Free throw line
I walked into the sweaty basketball gym with my shoes and basketball in my neon bag. I had just recently gotten new basketball shoes that were white and black. A week ago we had basketball tryouts for the Snow Canyon 7th and 8th grade team, and this was our second game of the season of 16 games. Some of my teammates were on the court warming up, wearing the new blue jerseys we had just barely gotten. I walked to the bench where my coach was sitting and started to put on my shoes. I finished lasing the last one and ran to the hoop to be with my team. Our first warm up drill was always layups, then jump shots, then pass and shoot. By now our full team was here and we were ready to start as our coach pulled us in to pick the starting players. Me and the other 4 starters jogged out to the center of the court for jump ball. After we get going, we are ahead and have possession of the ball. I drive in for the layup and the referee blows his whistle. I get to shoot two free throws because of the foul. I start to focus on my shot and I get the ball. Boom boom, the sounds of the two dribbles I always take before I shoot, I spin the ball in my hands and get in position. Focusing on the back of the rim I let the ball fly, Swish. The sweet sound of the net swishing. I repeat the process once more, but my second shot did not go in. My team bounces for the rebound and tries to put it back up, but soon it’s the other teams possession. In defence position, we finish our great game and get ready for the next one.
Great job Mix!!! I loved all of the details you put in. One suggestion I would make is on the sentence "The sweet sound of the net swishing." sounds like a sentence fragment. (not complete) I would just add "made my heart stop racing." I loved all of the sounds you put in, it made me feel like I was there! Keep it up!
ReplyDeleteI'll let you count this because it's creative non-fiction and your detail and descriptions are really well done. I like the action words like "swish", add more of those. I too love basketball and really enjoyed your piece! Well done!
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