Wednesday, March 25, 2015

Skylar's March Post

    My dad had finally found work. We made the big move to Vancouver just a few days ago. Being from California, all this snow is going to take some getting used to! My family said this move is for the “greater good”, but the way I see it? It just stinks. Canada is cold and boring. There is nothing to do here. I decided to go for a walk while my parents were dusting their antique basketball knick knacks (don’t ask) and the cold was literally unbearable. I could feel the cold in my bones as I walked down the street, even though I was wearing three shirts, two jackets and a scarf!  I was lost in a freezing stupor when I met them. The kids were playing a game that looked familiar, but I’d never actually seen played. Hockey. I watched but couldn’t tell what was going on. I’m a basketball guy. I’ve never been interested in hockey. What I could piece together  looked pretty straight forward to me. The kids were trying to hit a disk into the opposing goal with sticks, all while on ice skates. It only took a minute before they were colliding into each other and crashing to the ground trying to hit the puck. “Shouldn’t that be a foul?” I called out across the frozen lake. The game stopped. About four sets of eyes stared at me like I was on fire. Like I was dumb. Like I didn’t know the rules (I didn’t). All I knew was basketball, and in basketball, any one of those hits would get you disqualified for a season.
    “Look, it’s the new kid. What’s his name? John?” one of the kids finally yelled out, putting an end to the awkward silence. “It’s James, not John,” I yelled back. And with that, they skated over to me...


6 comments:

  1. bout but i kind of like it.... I like how you explained things great job, keep it up!!

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  2. Really cool story! It really tells about what it's like to move! Some periods were left out though. Keep writing!

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  3. Hey you wrote about basketball like me (inside joke haha) but I really like your story! It had great description and detail. Maybe think of continuing the story for your next post so we can find out what happens! Great work!

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    1. I actually was planning to continue it for my next post!

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  4. It was good and was descriptive.i think it might be better if you add more description to some parts. Overall it was good.

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  5. Nice! I like the narrative and where the story good go. Very solid start to a longer piece. You have such great voice when you write--it sounds very believable. As you revise, add more description so the reader can "see" more of what is happening. I'd love for you to continue this! Excellent writing:)

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