Tuesday, October 28, 2014

Zenit Contest - Brinley Sullivan

Dear Congress,


    Do you know what Veterans have done for us? A lot! The least we could do is let them keep their most loyal companion of all. Veterans should be able to adopt the dogs they worked with because they will be happier with them, they deserve to have their dogs after what they have done for us, and when they spend that much time with their dog, they grow emotionally attached to them.
    Veterans should be able to adopt the military dogs they worked with because they will be happier with them. In “Call of Duty” by Michael Paterniti, Jose says,”I couldn’t stop smiling. I’m still smiling. It felt like the beginning of a new life.” He was just so happy to be reunited with his dog, Zenit. The article also says,”Others, like Jose, began asking for their dogs, even though they were still of active duty.” They just missed their friends so much. Wouldn’t you want them to be happy again? I know I would. Thats why you should allow Veterans to adopt military dogs.
    Another reason that Veterans should be able to adopt their dogs is that everyone deserves a loyal companion to be with. No one wants to be alone. Jose Armenta said to Zenit, ”He’s like my quiet partner.” They trained and practiced commands together. “It was on those evenings that they were the happiest, just the two of them, working together.” They love their dogs so much, of course Veterans should be able to adopt them. It’s the least we can do, they served in the wars for us. Where would we be in the world without them?
    Last of all, Veterans should be able to keep the dogs they worked with because they grow emotionally attached to them. After his accident, Jose said,” We were a team. If just wanted my dog.” He loved Zenit more than anything. He also states they “Nothing felt right without him.” Some people might say that Veterans shouldn’t be allowed to keep their dogs, but as you can see by the reasons above, they obviously should be able to adopt them.
In conclusion, you can see that Veterans should be able to adopt their dogs because they will be happier people. After all, happy people make a happy world.  They deserve to keep them after they retire because they have given so much to this country. Last of all, when you are emotionally attached to something, you never want to let it go. I'd really appreciate it if you took this letter into consideration.


Sincerely,
Brinley Sullivan

3 comments:

  1. Great job Brinley! I loved how you gave lots of facts and what other people think to the reader. This essay made me think the Veterans should keep their dogs, too. If you could change something it would be to add Jose's last name at the very first time you mention him. Also, maybe you could write more specifically what Veterans do for us. Check for run on sentences! I loved it.

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  2. That was amazing! I loved the way you described the feelings between a soldier and their dog. You persuaded me to let veterans keep their most loyal companion. The only thing I would say is to add a rebuttal and counter claim next time, but other than that it was awesome!

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  3. Excellent entry--good mix of detail and defending your claim. Well done Brinley!

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