On September 11, 2001, a man named James went to work like any other day. As normal, he walked from his apartment to his small office building. On his way, he decided to go through Central Park, he only went through it on days he thought would be different. When he went through, he always noticed how vibrant the colors were because he was used to the city look and didn’t see trees and plants that much. When he came through the park it always seemed to put him in a good mood for the day. As he was walking through, he paused at a big tree and had a sudden memory of his childhood of playing around on that same tree with his friends, as he came back to reality he checked his watch, 7:49am, he still had about an hour to get to work, so he decided to go and see all the plants. As he walked through, he noticed a particular bouquet of flowers for sale that he thought were beautiful and he wondered how his wife would like them, so he made a note to come back through and get them when he was returning from work. James checked his watch again, 8:01am, he decided that he better start getting to work. As he started leaving the park, he felt an urge to stay a little longer, so he decided that he would go in 15 minutes, so those 15 minutes flew by as he was looking at all the unique plants by the lake. He soon heard a roaring engine and as he looked to see what the source was, he saw a plane that was heading directly to the twin towers. At first he didn’t know what to do, then he started reaching for his phone to make a call to the police, but then he realized that it would be useless because a cop couldn’t stop a 500 mile per hour plane. James felt as his heart stopped as soon as saw the explosion and a pillar of smoke rising out of the North Tower. Time seemed to have stopped, but the smoke is still rising. As he looked around people were still screaming and panicking trying to contact the police. About 15 minutes passed but felt like just seconds, people were screaming and freaking out but James had no idea what to do. Then he heard another horrific sound heading straight for the South Tower. As the second plane hit he heard the worst sound he has ever heard. A new pillar of smoke was floating up right beside the other one. As he looked back to the North Tower, he thought he saw some small dots falling out. He then realized that those are innocent people that are about to lose their lives because of a group of idiots who are set to ruin the lives of many others. After witnessing such a horrible crime he felt as he would never sleep again. He decided to go and buy the flowers for his wife and just go home, because he didn’t really want to go to work after seeing that, so, he went back to the flower seller but paused when he walked up, he saw all the beauty in the flowers and looked around a little more and saw all the beauty of the plants he saw before, and he decided not to let a horrific accident ruin his day, so he went to work like nothing ever happened. So, he had a thought, “The world would be a better place if everyone could see the beauty in everything and no matter how hard things are at the time”
Wow this is great. I didn't see anything wrong in your writing so I don't have any suggestions. This post almost made me cry! You did a really great job!
ReplyDeleteWow! What an interesting contrast between violence and beauty--concern and apathy. I found it kind of creepy, but such a compelling idea. I really enjoyed reading this. Good details too. In revision, break it up into paragraphs so it reads easier and make sure the "voice" of your character is consistent. Really interesting-great work!
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