Tuesday, October 28, 2014

I LOVE SCHOOL

 I LOVE SCHOOL

I LOVE SCHOOL,
I LOVE SCHOOL,
SCHOOL IS WHERE YOU LEARN,
SCHOOL IS WHERE YOU HAVE SOME FUN,
AND GET YOUR HOMEWORK DONE

I LOVE SCHOOL,
I LOVE SCHOOL,
SCHOOL IS WHERE YOU LEARN,
I LOVE TO TALK WITH ALL MY FRIENDS,
AND PLAN FOR OUR AWESOME WEEKENDS

I LOVE SCHOOL,
I LOVE SCHOOL,
SCHOOL IS WHERE YOU LEARN,
TIME TO HURRY TIME TO FUSS,
JUST MAKE SURE YOU CATCH THE BUS,
OH YES DO I LOVE SCHOOL!
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4 comments:

  1. UnknownOctober 29, 2014 at 8:03 AM

    I love it Luke i think it needs more rhythm. But other than that it looks great. Keep up the good work cuz!!!

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  2. AnonymousOctober 29, 2014 at 8:07 AM

    THANKS MATT!!!!!

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  3. AnonymousOctober 29, 2014 at 8:08 AM

    Nice job Luke, the things that you said in it are pretty much what you would do in school. I like how at the first of each part it kind of eases into the bottom part. All I think that could make it better is add a few more rhymes. Keep up the great work!

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  4. Mrs.RobinsNovember 2, 2014 at 4:31 PM

    Luke, you're killing me with all caps--it seems like you are shouting:) As you revise, get some more detail, description and depth. Instead of all the repetition, use adjectives to make your reader feel and see.

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