Food is great,
Food doesn't hurt me,
Food doesn't say mean things about me,
We all get along with food,
Food doesn't disappoint me,
Food keeps me alive,
Sometimes food doesn't get along with me,
But that is only when my stomach doesn't get along with me,
And when my stomach doesn't get along with me,
Some bad things start to happen...
Bad things as if my tummy were to erupt with great speed...
Then splosh,
Food is everywhere...
But like I said,
That only happens when my stomach doesn't agree with me.
My most favorite food of all time is fried chicken,
My least favorite food is onions,
And don't even get me started about mushrooms...
My favorite fruit is watermelon,
But I also love chocolate covered strawberries!
My least favorite fruit is probably bananas,
My favorite candy is Airheads... Maybe,
My least favorite candy is the Mexican Chile candy...
But in general I just love food,
I want to marry food!
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ReplyDeleteVery good! I love food too! without it I would literally die! The only thing I would change about this post is to try not to say food in every sentence, but that's just me.
ReplyDeleteLucy, you need to add a lot to this to get more points. Good start of a poem or a humorous piece. Improve it by adding details: what kinds of food, describe the food, maybe personify your stomach or have your stomach talk to add variety to your piece. Do some revision and resubmit on the blog:)
ReplyDeleteI like it but add more detail like maybe different a foods you like and different foods you don't like
ReplyDeleteMuch better, weave in some "color" words and similes and metaphors to improve it even more! Thanks:)
ReplyDeleteGood Job, I liked how you said all the things that could happen when you eat food, I think you could make it better by adding more adjectives to describe a little more. I thought it was a little confusing but a great poem.
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