Fall
When fall is here, the holidays are near
The burning hot sun goes away
and the cool breeze comes everyday
The leaves turn bright red, yellow, and brown
through out all of the town
It is the time for boots and sweaters
as we come into the perfect weather
Pumpkin carving, Halloween,
hot coco with warm steam
Thanksgiving, Christmas trees
and then snow starts to gleam
The holidays are here
which brings me great cheer
It is definitely my favorite time of year
I think that it is great but, maybe put commas on the very end of every sentence.
ReplyDeleteI really liked how you described it, and the only think I would fix is to have more punctuation.. Great Job
ReplyDeleteReally love this:) As you revise, get rid of "the" at the beginning of the sentences. Also, make your verbs active: like "turning", "bringing". I love the imagery, you captured the magic of my very favorite time of the year!
ReplyDeleteThis is really great and easy to Imagine. I do agree that it could use more comma's and punctuation though.
ReplyDeleteYour post was great! I agree that you should add more comma's however.
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