True
Friends
In
my mind,
these
are the things you will find.
Your
smile;
I
can see from half a mile.
Becoming
friends was the right choice,
and
there is courage in your voice
You
showed me how to be happy,
even
when I walk around sadly.
Your
beating, loving heart is full,
and
you have the brightest soul.
Your
personality teaches me,
what
I am not able to see.
You
are there for me when I fall,
and
there when I need a call.
I
see life in a whole different way,
just
because of the things you say.
So
this is a big thank you,
for
all the things that you do.
I really like the theme of your poem. It is so true. I didn't really get the 3rd line but other than that it was perfect
ReplyDeleteIt was a very good poem. You were very creative and it was great. When you say, your personality teaches me what im not able to see, it would be better if you said, shows me, instead of saying teaches me.
ReplyDeleteI loved this poem, I like how you showed how you really feel about friends. I also didn't get the third line, maybe you can adjust that part.
ReplyDeleteOther than that I enjoyed your poem
great liked it a lot! Some things i would fix is the third line and try to make the rhyming lines have the same amount of syllables. other then that great.
ReplyDeleteEven though I am not a big fan of rhyming poems--this one worked well. I like the easy flow of the words in describing a friendship. Maybe switch up the words some and get rid of the "you's". It's a beautiful poem and I really enjoyed it.
ReplyDeleteNice poem, one thing is I would add more detail. But great job!
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