Tuesday, October 28, 2014

Fall

Fall

Fall is near
Time to cheer.
Ring the bells
Smell the smells.

Here we go 
Down the road 
Then inside to have cocoa.
Have a laugh 
Play all day.

Read a book 
Then sleep all day.
Time to cheer
Fall is near.

5 comments:

  1. Great matt. I liked it a lot. I would add some rhyming to it though but still great.

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  2. Good job Matt! I liked your poem but i also agree with luke. The beginning started off great but maybe you could rhyme a little more and it would be great! Keep up the great work!

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  3. Great poem, but I like how you listed all the things that you do in fall, I think a lot of people could relate to that. I think you need to add a little more rhyming near the middle part. Keep up the great work!

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  4. Good start--you need to add a lot to this. Think of appealing to your readers senses, make them see, hear, smell and feel:) Adjectives can be your friend--use them!

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  5. Nice Job Matt. I think that you are good at writing poems. I really liked how much you rhymed. My favorite lines were when you said "ring the bells, smell the smells". The only thing I think you should change is just add a lot more to it. It is really short, but it is still a pretty good poem.

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