Magic
Magic isn't just rabbits in hats,
Or zippity doo make ants into cats.
It's not pulling coins out of your ears,
and going to the past a few years.
It's the smile you have on Christmas morn,
the warm feeling when a sibling is born.
and happy family bike rides and hikes,
when you're on a coaster you're filled with yikes.
Magic is brilliant in both ways,
Magic of the moment is best by days.
When you tell the truth or do something right,
you will feel warm, cozy, and very bright.
Sounds Dr. Suess-inspired and I like it! Beautifully written rhyme--nice rhythm. Your word choices are really unique and fun to read. I didn't know what to expect next. "...and going to the past a few years" seemed a little out of place with the rest. Other than that, it looks great and I really enjoyed reading it.
ReplyDeleteVery nice detail and ryming I agree with mrs robins the going to the past for a few years is a little out of place but other than that love the description you gave
ReplyDeleteLoved the poem! Great writing. When you said, " the magic of the moment is best by days" it didn't make much sense to me. Maybe you could replace it with other words but the same meaning. But I still loved it! Awesome work.
ReplyDeleteGreat poem! Loved the rhyming words you used. When you said " and going to the past few years" did you mean time travel? And I agree with hallie on the "best by days" I made me think of magic in a whole different perspective! Loved how you put a twist on it! Keep up the good work:)
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed reading this poem, I liked how you said, "Magic isn't just rabbits in hats". I like you are didn't only say what magic tricks are, but also the real magic in life. When you said, "and going to the past a few years" didn't seem like a ending, it seems like it shouldn't be at the end of the paragraph. But other than that, this was a amazing poem! Keep up the good work.
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