December post
Magic
Magic isn't just rabbits in hats,
and zippity doo make ants into cats.
It's not pullingcoins out of your ears,
or going to the past a few years.
It's the smile you have on Christmas morn,
the warm feeling when a sibling is born.
and happy family bike rides and hikes,
when you're on a coaster you're filled with yikes.
Magic is brilliant in both ways,
Magic of the moment is best, by days.
When you tell the truth or do something right,
you will feel warm, cozy, and very bright.
and zippity doo make ants into cats.
It's not pulling
or going to the past a few years.
It's the smile you have on Christmas morn,
the warm feeling when a sibling is born.
and happy family bike rides and hikes,
when you're on a coaster you're filled with yikes.
Magic is brilliant in both ways,
Magic of the moment is best, by days.
When you tell the truth or do something right,
you will feel warm, cozy, and very bright.
[November comment]
ReplyDeleteVery good poem! I don't have skill like that.
One change I might make, but wouldn't have to (just to make the rhythm of it a bit better), I would change stanza #9 to
"Magic is brilliant in many ways"
But It just depends.
Keep up the great work!
I liked how you used ryhming, there was not any major mastakes but i found a minor mistake in stanza #3, you wrote ears when it should be ear. But it was a great short poem! Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteNice job Sadie!! I really like your poem. I agree with David and Ethan. "Magic is brilliant in many ways." might work or not. However, "ears" could be ear too. Great job!! :)
ReplyDeleteWOWOWOW!!! love the peom. It made me think for a moment about all the magical moments i've had in my life!!! It totally makes sense! Good job!!!! I also agree with Audrey! GREAT JOB!!
ReplyDeleteThis is really cute! I loved it and I might as well print it out and hang it on my wall. The only thing I was confused was the coaster with 'yikes'. I was like, "what are yikes? Why haven't I heard of them before?" It was a very smart rhyming word, but I was a little confused.
ReplyDeleteGood improvements over last time:) I like the rhymes a lot, especially your unique word choices. When you do use a sound work, like yikes, put it in quotations: "yikes!"
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