Sunday, December 7, 2014

December Post

National Dance Competition


Have you ever felt fear, nervousness, scared, or mysterious all at the same time? Well, we sure did! It was an exciting day on our way to the Disney Land Hotel! I was so excited I felt like I was going to burst of nervousness, but it was the longest six hour drive of my life! We finally reached the Disney Land Hotel.  When we walked in I could feel the cool breeze sift through my hair.
Secondly, it was the day before competition, and the day for Disney Land to begin! When we got there I could smell the sugary, sweet churros, from the little food cart. We slowly pushed the strollers trying to get closer, and closer to the rides. Running, and scrimmaging to get our fast passes for the next ride, so we didn’t have to wait in the long windy lines!
Finally, it was the day! The day of competition. We entered the Disney Land Hotel Entrance around 9 o'clock. There was music blasting as if it was for a deaf person to listen to. We entered a room that had a sign and said  “Dancers Only,” and then my mom and Iwalked into another entrance that said “Girls Dressing Room.” As we got closer to each room, my heart started beating faster and faster. A couple hours later we had to get our costumes, and makeup on, and we were set!
My mom started to pump us up backstage, stretching and you know all that! Two more and we were next! This was Nationals! As were were waiting nervously we were called up by the announcer. “Shayli and Rylee, G is for Girl.” When we walked onstage our faces were probably the color of a cherry. We heard all the cheering and screaming when they called our names. I thought I was famous for a second!
Now it was time for the awards! We weren’t as nervous but we could still feel it in there trying to come out! “our first place winner is, Shayli and Rylee” That was exciting but that’s not all! They were calling out the overall scores in the nation for that dance competition! And our overall winner is Shayli and Rylee!”  We heard all the screaming, and chanting as they called our name. When we received the trophies, the diamonds glistened in the bright lights on the stage. A few minutes after we got a call. It was a call from our coach/dance teacher. He told us that we were on a Live Cam and he watched us! This trip was the highlight of my summer!
We went back to the hotel and it was two days before it was time to leave. You know the California , when you smell the beachy air and the palm trees gently sway in the breeze, and hear the waves crash onto the shore, you never want to leave that.

Last but not least it was the day, the day when there was no nervousness, mysterious, or excitement. The family and I were on our way home to Utah. It  was the best week ever experienced! I really enjoyed having this opportunity to compete at  Nationals!

3 comments:

  1. Great job Shayli! You really brought out your feelings and emotions. That's so cool that you won nationals!! One thing I think you should look into is that there are a few words that are missing and commas that are out of place throughout the story, but other than that great job.

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  2. I thought you did a great job! It's always fun competing against other people for something big. I thought you could have described what it was like, being on stage a little more. But other than that I loved it! :)

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  3. Good advice from Sophie and Baylee. I can see your revision making things better and better with each step. Trying adding an expanded moment where you slow down time and describe in great detail. Use words to describe what you feel, smell, taste, touch, hear, etc. Looking forward to your revision!

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