My Dream Revised
I suddenly appeared at my Baker Reunion in Big Johns Flat on Beaver Mountain. I could feel a cool breeze brushing past my face and the delicious pine smell lingered! All my family was there except my mom who died a few months earlier. When we got there we set our trailer up and we sat around the fire telling funny stories and memories about my mom. Everyone was still sad about our loss. Sometimes I get sad when we talk about her. It just makes me miss her so I decided to go on a little walk around the mountain.
All of the sudden I saw a white limo drive up. I was confused for a minute. Then I saw the back door open in the limo and I saw my mom walk out! I had tears running down my face, I was so happy! I ran up to her and I gave her a hug as if I never wanted to let go! She was wearing all white as if she was an angel.
She came and sat by us and we talked for a short time until her phone rang. It wasn’t her usual phone, it was a white phone with white wings.The back of the phone was smooth and soft! When it her phone rang the wings would go up and down like they were flying. My mom answered the phone. After she had talked for about a minute she hung up and she said that she had to go.
All of the sudden I woke up from my dream laying in my usual bed. I still remember my moms voice and her laugh. When I woke I immediately went to my dad and I told him about my dream. He told me that it was my mom saying that she loved me and that she misses me. He also told me that she probably had to go visit another family member so that's why she had to leave. I don’t quite remember what we were talking about in my dream but I know that she loves me and I love her. I hope that one day I will have another dream like that one!
Soooo sweet! I love this and you Annie! One thing, when you have two sentences that could go together, instead of writing two sentences, put the together and write one. But other than that it was awesome!
ReplyDeleteAwesome. Touching. Is this a true story?
ReplyDeleteAnnie, so good and sweet and precious and amazing all at the same time just like you. You said "as if " right after each other in the 3rd paragraph so maybe you could change that up with other wording.You could also describe how you felt when you saw your mom a little more. Other than that super great story!!
ReplyDeleteThis makes me cry every time I read it. There are so many things you do right between the emotion and description. Writing about things close to your heart is the best way to heal--keep it up:)
ReplyDeleteWow, this is so touching Annie. I loved your writing and how you expressed how you felt when you saw your mom coming out of the limo. I think if you change some wording in paragraph 3, it would make this piece even better. Great job, keep up the good work.
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