November Writing Contest
Kyler Gibb
P.2
“Happiness is not having what you want. It is wanting what your have.” This means that you have to be thankful for what you have and not want and want and want. I am grateful for everything I have and enjoy every part of it. You have to be happy and always enjoy what you have. It’s ok to want something but always enjoy what you have.
Good idea with the quote!
ReplyDeleteHowever, this should be a little longer.
Also, the repetition of " want" is unnecessary.
This is really good. I think you should've made it longer though, it would be even better if you did that. I like how you started off with the quote, but who is it by? Or di you just make it up? It's a really good quote. I lost my place when you did all the "want"s though. Also, in the quote it said "It is wanting what your have." Is the "r" supposed to be there? Great job!
ReplyDeleteOh I meant did not di
DeleteIs this your revision for the December post? You need to go back and revise it--make it longer to demonstrate your writing ability.
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