I
have moved all across the country, even the world. From New York, to Brazil, to
Italy, then Africa, then Germany, back to NY, to Montana, then California, then
finally to Nebraska, to stay. I have dozens of friends from around the world
that I have left.
Every
time we’d move, we’d need a week to pack. That meant an entire week away from
friends, the outside, and a week without my bed. It was always the first thing
packed. Sleeping on the floor with one blanket in my cold room was not a
picnic. No time for goodbyes when boarding the plane. It was all ‘grab the
suitcases and let’s go before we’re late’ kind of a thing. It was nice to get a
new house once in a while, but I loved our house in Nebraska. I was able to get
my own room for once.
After
a long hug, their mom came to pick her up, followed by Saige’s and the twins’
mom. A few minutes later, my mom came and I walked slowly to her black minivan.
“How
was it?” she asked, a hint of sadness in her voice, but I didn’t seem to notice
it.
“Nadili
and Linda are moving!” I suddenly blurted, trying to hold back tears. Justin,
who was a year older than me and had a huge crush on Nadili, gasped and then
sputtered, “Oh yea! SHE IS!!”
“Sweetie,
speaking of moving-,” my mom started, but I continued to spill, “They’re moving
next week and I won’t see them again and their mom has a Gmail account but she
uses it for work and they have no house phone and-.”
“Sweetie,
we’re moving too!” my mom shouted, her eyes fixed on the road ahead. I was left
there, my mouth hanging open, about to complain even more about the sorrows of
Nadili moving.
“W-w-where?”
I stammered my voice so quiet I thought she couldn’t hear.
“We’re
moving to a small island just off the coast of Florida. It’s
called…Molinia…something like that…?”
“It’s
called Milonia mom,” my older sister Cathy corrected, looking at a small
pamphlet, “and it’s a special island for MLC’s where they are able to do magic
freely without anyone else knowing. They’re cabins, a small town, and even a
large zip line.” She handed the pamphlet back and I stared at the picture on
the front: a small island about the size of two large cities with a large tree
covered mountain with lots of fun looking trails. Just barely hidden in a patch
of trees were ancient ruins, obviously from the middle ages. With a few
sideways glances and close examination, a destroyed watch tower seemed to be
there, and even a small part of the entryway. A flag that looked like it was
supposed to be yellow was brown from mold and dirt.
Beside
the ruins was a very tall oak tree that looked at least five stories high. The
tree looked very old and had leaves many different shades of green. The trunk
must have been at least four stories high, and the leaves added an extra story.
The trunk was a very dark brown color, unlike the trees surrounding it, which
was a tan color.
A
large waterfall that splashed into a small lake that opened up into a river
flowed beside of the castle. The water of the waterfall came from the bluest lagoon
I had ever seen and looked perfect for canoeing and kayaking.
Really cool! I like where your going in this story. TONS of details and interesting story line!
ReplyDeleteGreat job! You are such a great writer. Your story was so interesting. There was only one thing I saw. Example:"It's called Milonia mom." You need a comma between Milonia and mom. Besides that, it looked perfect to me. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteYep, agree with the above. I read so much in between your chapters that I forgot the storyline! I didn't realize her family knew she was magic. The use of detail in this passage is outstanding. I was able to get a clear picture in my mind and I'm looking forward to more:)
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