November Post
Once upon a time, there was this nerd. He was watching some nerd show on TV when he decided to hack into NASA's space program and launch a rocket. Now, this nerd was the kind of nerd who would eventually start a incredibly famous internet startup that would earn him billions. Anyway, 2 hours later, he had hacked into the database. He was browsing for rockets when he saw one named the N.U.K.E project. "I wonder what that is," he said. No sooner had he put in the launch codes when people dressed in black with riot helmets and body armor burst into his room. They put him under arrest for launching a nuke on china. "Oh, so that's what it does," the nerd said. Then a nuclear war started and killed everyone.
This story is very interesting. I would like to see some more detail and you could make it much longer. I did enjoy reading it because of the nerdyness of it and creativity of it. Good Job!
ReplyDeleteI liked this story a lot but maybe if you made it a little longer with a little more detail it could be even more fantastic! other than that keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteGood job! Really funny! Dont make it longer but I suggest adding another story to go with it.
ReplyDeleteVery funny! You could add a little more detail to make it a little longer, but other than that, good job.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this and I thought it was very funny. I was about to laugh out loud when I realized that there were a bunch of other people and I didn't want them to look at me so I had to keep on switching and waiting for about a minute before I could read it. I really loved it, I think you should keep it but add a second part to it.
ReplyDeleteGood job! Very funny. I agree with the 5 people in from to me to add more detail to make it longer. Good start! Other than that, good job!!
ReplyDeleteI have to agree with Braden on what he said. But other than that it is all great.
ReplyDeleteHilarious job on this, this short article literally made me want to LOL. However, I still agree with everyone else that this is way to abrupt of an ending, and that it really just says "This is a nerd. A super smart nerd. But he hacked N.A.S.A. and launched a nuke on China and was arrested, and a nuclear war started. THE END" This is a summary of this entire article, just look at it and you'll see what I mean.
ReplyDeleteP.S. use this as your december writing contest, you could do a lot.
Very good! I would recommend adding a bit more detail and making it longer.
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