What I Did Over Christmas Break
(Post for January)
My Christmas break was unusual, although it started out pretty normal. I got lots of soccer things for Christmas like cleats, a soccer jacket, a soccer ball, and even a soccer goal. Every thing was going great for me. However, one day soon after Christmas, me and my little brothers got a letter in the mail. It said that our family was going on a surprise trip. We got exited and started freaking out. After that day we got in the car and drive off. It was kind of weird not knowing where you were going to sleep that night. All my mom and dad said is that the place we were going was interesting.
After driving in the van for about five hours, there we were and there it was. I was out in the middle of nowhere near Death Valley. All we saw was a one hundred year old hotel. The paint was coming off. The walls looked like they were about to fall down any minute There was a lock on one of the doors. It looked like the place had been abandoned for years. But, there was no other place for us to sleep the night, at least that's what mom said.
We walked into the rusty old hotel. It was lined with green carpet. There were lots of random images painted on the walls, and it smelled really bad. It was very surprising to see two people were actually there. They gave us our key and then we walked down to the room. As I walked down the hall, I saw the pipes on the walls. Room after room after room. It just kept on going. There was real paint on the walls that was starting to come off. At the very end of the hall, there was a very large creepy mirror on the wall draped in red velvet. My dad told us that when it got dark, the images in the mirror would talk back to you.
Finally we found the place where we would be sleeping. There were small beds, a desk, and one, very foul-smelling bathroom. The room had no heater, and it was freezing. "Oh great," I thought, " I will just have to sleep in the van."
After our family unloaded our bags, we took a tour of the hotel. I was completed surprised by what the tour had in store for us. The door with the lock on it turned out to be an opera house. There were pictures and paintings on every wall, every door frame, and ceiling. Every inch was covered with paint. The paintings had a king and queen, knights, cats, jokers, and much more.
Staying overnight wasn't that bad, actually, even though I had to sleep on the floor. It was cold, but it worked out in the end. That was the highlight of my Christmas break.
This was a really great essay. You described everything really well. Next time maybe you could describe the car trip a little more but overall it was really interesting!
ReplyDeleteThat was a pretty good essay, you did a good job at describing your essay over all. Your grammar was also pretty good. If you could make your thesis statement stand out and make it a little bit stronger, your essay would be even better.
ReplyDeleteYou did really good. Very descriptive. I did see some run on sentences because there wasn't any periods. Good job.
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I think that your essay was very descriptive and good. The only thing, is I would describe what the car trip was like.
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