Music
There are so many different kinds of music to listen to. So much variety. It is amazing how much talent people have to make music. Being able to listen to the music that other people make and liking how it sounds, is so fascinating. Sometimes I want to make my own, and I want to see how people would react to it. Would they like it? would it relate to someones life? Music can change your mood no matter what it is. When you are having a bad day, just listen to some happy tunes and it will take the stress away.
Marvelous! I would recommend adding a little more detail about what listening to music is like.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Shayne. Detail can make a big difference. Other than that, it's amazing!
ReplyDeleteIt was really good. There was only one capitalization error and it was "would it relate to someones life"? Next time try to catch that but other than that it was really good!!!!!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Shayne. Detail can make a big difference. Other than that, it's amazing! There was only one capitalization error and it was "would it relate to someones life"? Next time try to catch that but other than that it was really good!
ReplyDeleteGreat job! I think that if you added a little more detail about music! Other than that you did amazing!
ReplyDeleteAmazing writing! I loved every sentence. But maybe instead of having so many different sentences, make some compound sentences. Also you need to capitalize " would". But great job!
ReplyDeleteGood job! That really makes me want to listen to music right now. I would like it to be a bit longer because it's really good.
ReplyDeleteI thought it was fantastic!!! I really got in to it and you started to get me to think!!! The only thing I really saw was the capitalization error and it was "would". Great job!!!
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