Tuesday, January 13, 2015

Journey to the Center of the Earth (Part One) - Brinley Sullivan

Once upon a time, there was a princess named Gladia. She was a science geek. Gladia always wanted to travel to the center of the Earth, but everyone said that it was impossible. She wanted to prove them wrong so she built a submarine to go there.
In the middle of the night, she sneaks out of her castle, and goes to the docks where her submarine is parked. She put all of her luggage in the luggage compartment, put on her seat belt, and she was on her way.
She went down to the bottom of the ocean and then her ears started to pop. So, she thought about what to do. Gladia decided to go to the luggage compartment, got her earplugs, and she was fine. She went back to steering to the deepest part so that she could start to drill down through the three to five mile thick crust.
Gladia kept drilling for five days straight. Eventually she got so bored that she got her magical teleporter and just teleported through the entire crust to the hot, liquid mantle.
Right after Gladia got to the mantle using her magical teleporter, she put up her portable force field to protect her, and the submarine, from the pressure and heat of the mantle. Without it she would have burned to ashes.
Gladia traveled through the mantle so slowly. The molten rock was like gooey tar, almost impossible to go through. But after three years and her super sonic boom that she turned on, she finally made it to the outer core.
The outer core too was liquid rock and the pressure also very great. Gladia put up her second portable force field and everything was just swell. That is, until it popped. She got out her last of the remaining force fields and put it up.

3 comments:

  1. Great story!!! I liked the creativity of it and your plot was very good. But, I think that you could be much more descriptive. Good job!

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  2. Really good! I would recommend adding more description.

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  3. Nice Job! I really liked all the creativity of the story. All I think you could do is add more description. I hope you make a second. Keep up the great work.

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